What Is The Theme Of Justice In THE RIGHTER

THE RIGHTER is a classic revenge thriller. A grieving brother decides to enact his own form of justice to right a wrong that was done to his brother. Revenge films are tried and true, there’s always an audience for them. The goal is clear and the stakes are fairly high. The plot is driven by the theme of justice. However, to be successful, the plot has to offer the audience something new and exciting that hasn’t been done before. The script attempts to do this with the idea that criminals’ faces have been reconstructed, making it more difficult for the protagonist to enact his justice. It’s a very intriguing idea. While there are definite strengths to the storytelling, the promise of the premise is not fully delivered yet. There are several …show more content…

Maybe James stumbles upon the conspiracy that they are reconstructing faces of criminals. The people behind the conspiracy want him to keep this quiet. So not only is he searching for Andy, but he’s being pursued. To some extent it’s done now, but not as strongly as it can be. Also, clarify what metal objects James slips into Andy’s pocket. It’s not clear. In fact, the idea of James breaking into the prison isn’t fully believable. It would be more credible for him to wait until Andy is being released. The idea that James gets a list of the prisoners that were recently released is credible, however it’s not believable that James keeps killing the wrong Andy. This makes James feel like a very uniformed and unintelligent person. When it happens once, one would think James would take other measures to insure that he has the right person. Also, the script becomes repetitive. James finds the wrong Andy, kills them, and then he finds the next person, and kills them. Instead, show James searching for Andy. When he learns he has a new face, then show how James suspect a specific person of being Andy and he investigates this person to determine if he’s really the Andy he wants or …show more content…

The script is long and needs to be cut to fewer than 110 pages. The descriptions are wordy and the best word choices are not always made. For example, the opening scene is overly written and wordy. Later, there’s no reason to say that James’ face is untouched (on page 114). It’s not relevant. The rule is to keep the descriptions lean and precise. The description that “he cleans himself up of all that is emitted from his mouth,” is not the best word choice. Cut act one, turning point etc. (the reader doesn’t need this). Make sure the INT. and EXT. are correct. For example, in the opening scene at the Air Force base if it’s an exterior scene, it should be EXT. On page 3, Joe calls each man’s name out and this should be in dialogue format. On page 4, if they are in a “chit-chat” conversation, this needs to be in dialogue format, but all dialogue should have a purpose and not be chitchat. On page 11, if Mhairi is talking, then this needs to be in dialogue format too, unless the audience is not hearing it. There’s a repetitive habit to use the word “Later” in a description – eliminate this (page 12 etc.) On page 23, there’s extra spacing in the format. There are some misspelled words and improper grammar, but with a good edit this is easily