First, I love speculative/science fiction; “What if…”
Your creative mind took this question and ran with it. I also remember that a dream inspired you to write this story and I find that aspect fascinating. The chapters you provided caused me to wish for more! I can see a series of books springing from your first one.
I am intrigued by the special powers being exhibited by the children and I also want to know how the powers occurred. I am curious as to how the plague began and what it did to the world’s population. Did we lose our ability to use and create technology? I imagine these questions will be fleshed out in other chapters and my curiosity is a healthy symptom of a reader that is interested in the story.
You maintained third
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I understand you wanted to start the chapter with tension, so when it opens, Raymond is mid-air. It is also possible to ramp up the tension by starting with a quick brother sister argument culminating in him being ‘pushed away’ and screaming for mom to help. The reader would still be intrigued by Gianna’s display of abilities and eager to learn more. If this isn’t a good suggestion for you, then maybe try cutting some of Gianna’s dialogue to make it more believable for a six year …show more content…
I’m a big fan of futuristic writing. Maybe incorporate a few futuristic slang terms in the dialogue to help the reader feel like they are in the future.
4. Not a lot of setting description. Perhaps this is in earlier/later chapters? As a reader I would respectfully ask for more descriptive passages either by judicious author summary, dialogue, or action.
5. Page 3: “Becky’s ears popped and Giana was gone; “What the?...” I didn’t immediately realize that Giana had teleported out. Maybe a little more description of how it looked to Mom, other than just ‘gone’.
You have a strong start to an ingenious story! The bones are there and the foundation is solid. I get the feeling that these chapters are just grazing the surface of an expansive storyline rich in detail as to why the world ‘is as it is’. Third person omniscient POV was used well and suits your story. The dialogue moved the story along and introduced tension, plot devices, and story arc. I really appreciate the opportunity to read and comment on your work. It was a
1. Explain the setting of the novel. What influence, if any, does it have on the story?
What are the situations that the characters are put in? Well, in the passage “Klondike Gold Rush”
To begin with, the passages include that the characters lacks of maturity and that they are shy. First, in the
These settings in the novel play a crucial role in shaping Saul’s coping mechanisms,
A. What gift would you like to give to the main character? Why? (Connect your choice of a gift to the character’s traits and or plot). The gift I would like to give to the main character of “Firegirl”, Tom Bender, is a men’s necklace with a sleek pendant and a dumbbell only for about five dollars.
The book When Plague Strikes, is about 3 deadly diseases. It 's about the Black Death, Smallpox, and AIDS. Each of these diseases can cause a serious outrage of death. The book also tells about how doctors try to come up with treatments, medicines, and antibiotics to try and cure these diseases. All these diseases got the best out of everyone. Some people reacted differently than others with these diseases. All the diseases came in play in A. D. 1347, when the Black Death broke out for the first time in what’s today is know. As southern Ukraine.
For my conceptual artifact, I decided to go with a film that I watched in High School called No One Would Tell. This film is a great example of dating violence and covers a lot of the phases of being in an abusive relationship. The film is centered around two main characters, Stacy Collins who is the girlfriend being abuse and Bobby Tennison who is the abusive boyfriend. This film goes to show how a relationship that looks happy to many people, may actually have darker secrets. Through the film we see the level of abuse rising, but at the same time we see Stacy falling prey to all of Bobby's pleas of forgiveness. Like in many real lifes cases of domestic abuse, it’s not as easy to get out as many people would think. Unfortunately, Stacy was
Adding futuristic details in stories can be a great way to help develop a plot and establish a theme. The genre of science fiction uses this principle to convey a message to the reader, but at the same time, keeping the story interesting and exciting enough to continue reading. Both Bruce Coville (author of “Old Glory”) and Kurt Vonnegut, Jr. (author of “Harrison Bergeron”) use the setting of the future to develop the themes of their stories in similar ways and in different ways. First off, both authors use the uncertainty of the future to make their themes more believable. Contrary to being set in the present, most readers do not have a clear view of what is plausible in the future, which makes the theme more believable for readers.
I can’t think of any other story I’ve read that is similar to this one; it is very unique. That being said, I don’t really like it. I enjoy a story with surreal or metaphorical elements, but for me to enjoy it, there has to be some cohesion by the end. I don’t like walking away thinking, “That was a mess.” For hours after reading it, I was going over it in my head, trying to glue the story together in a way that made sense, but I couldn’t. There are so many things going on that it felt like it was just weird for the sake of being weird.
It was quite a twist when the reader found out the dad and Uncle Steve were actually robots and that there were different types of people like people made of saltwater and seaweed, and it was also quite strange how everyone seemed to just seemed to forget about the whole situation and just keep playing games, like this might have been a normal occurrence, the story also had a good use of imagery, where it painted a picture in my mind of how might these people look like and how was his dad being repaired, or how did the smoke spewing out of his dad look like. In the end, this seemed strange but made the reader wonder, is this how our future could look
This plague struck sixty percent of the population and killed all of them. No doctors knew how to treat this disease because it was a new and strong disease. After a few days with this virus you would have died. People that lived with those affected had to stay away, because even being in a room with someone who was affected could get you affected with this disease. It was so dangerous and many families split apart because of this.
In this paper I will be talking about the book “ When Plague Strikes the Black Death, Smallpox, AIDS by James Cross Giblin.” I will also talk about how I think it connects to what we have learned this school year.
Crosby introduces the novel by detailing the plague seemingly at its worst level. The symptoms of the fever are described,
As I continue, sentences by sentences the story took even more different roads, until finally it all just click together. Of course, without structure I had so many frustrating writer 's block moment but that allowed me to go back to the original story and find new ways to get inspired. Also since I been writing this piece everywhere I go since Wednesday, I was also able to be influenced by my surrounding. Overall, I do not regret my way of writing this fanfiction because I believe that in order to capture Clemencia thoughts fully, the best way to attack it is by also letting my thoughts as Clemencia piece together as naturally as possible.
Three specific examples of how setting influenced the actions and attitudes of the characters are: The isolation from a civilized world, the mysteries of an unfamiliar place, and different social types being forced to live with one another. How these examples are to be proven will be developed in the following paragraphs.