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Salem Witch Trials: Assignment Analysis

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The assignment provided the student with an opportunity to enlighten the reader and shed more light on the issue of the Salem Witch Trials. Keeping with the aim of the assignment, I believe the student was supposed to break down the paper into an introduction- briefly discussing the issue of Witch Trials; body paragraphs- relating the causes of the Witch Trials; and a conclusion- a recap of what was discussed. The student followed the structure, but they were not consistent. As I read through the introduction, I found it confusing, or perhaps incomplete. The introductory paragraph starts with a convincing premise, but loses focus when the student tries to relate the year the Witch Trials began. I expected the student to introduce me to the …show more content…

This is, however, not the primary cause of the trials. Rather, historians believe that the Salem Witch Trials were a result of mass hysteria- though various theories attempted to recount the causes. The student has addressed a single theory. However, I expected approaches such as the society's well-built conviction in the occult; contention, disputes, and personal differences; the cold weather theory; among others. The student should try and explore in detail other causes of the witch trials.
I noticed various grammatical and punctuation errors. Additionally, the content of the paper lacks flow. I also noticed the use of slang phrases within the work. For example, while the student meant ‘to expose' ‘unveil' ‘denounce,' they used the phrase ‘ratted out.' Slang language is a very informal type of communication that is more common in speech than in writing.
Lack of proper citation is yet another issue I came across while reading the paper. When using direct quotations, MLA standards dictate that the author writes the name and page number of the quote to enable the reader easily refer to the source. Throughout the paper, there are no page numbers to the direct quotes. For instance"… the witch trials began because of the fear that the colonial men had" (Ray

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