First Reader’s Comments: Specific Comments: S1, L1 - I wonder if “dark” is the right choice of word in this line. I get the image that you’re trying to establish - something foreign and deep - but the tone of dark is menacing, contrasting with the warmth of the “lush” rainforest and the description of the “newborn” in the following stanza. As a result, I would recommend replacing “dark” with a softer word that describes the sea, such as “intense” or “deep”. S1, L3-4 - I like how you maintain the consistent imagery of the rainforest with the description of “bright colors”-nice job! The phrasing of this second line is also really nice. S2, L4 - The shift to the static of the television (or other electronic device) seems a bit sudden in this …show more content…
Throughout the poem, I was really impressed by your use of visceral imagery. It was particularly striking in the second stanza through the use of personification (“the walls breathe like a newborn”). Your use of unique metaphors and figurative language added to the depth of the poem. The shift from the warmth of the “infant” to the “strange creatures” back to the “soothing rain” was a nice way to bring the poem together and to build it as well. The poem left me feeling warm and whole at the end. Great job! In terms of things to work on, I would recommend combing through the piece and remedying issues of clarification. For instance, at the beginning of the second stanza, the shift from the metaphoric “sea” (which I assume is in the narrator’s sleep) to the walls of their room is a bit sudden. I would recommend either starting the poem in the narrator’s room before transitioning into the first stanza or making it more clear in a transition into the second stanza. In addition, I suggest making sure that the imagery and ideas that you present are consistent. While all of the images are quite beautiful the way they are written, they seem at odds at each other, and lack a central idea to tie them together. For instance, the second and third stanzas seem to refer to the dangers of technology whereas the first and last stanzas refer to the soothing nature of sleep. I suggest bridging together these ideas in order to let your poem
Over all, the poem helps imagine a possible student siting in a desk, reading a poem, and pulling his/ her hair out. Also the poem’s sound seems to be rushed. Together with the tone, it makes the poem sound like an angry student speaking very fast as to why he/she hates poetry. The rhythm seems to be regular. It shows to have a regular beat of unstress and distress. Each line follows a beat, but the lines don’t rhyme. The poem seems to show a few figures of speech. “Has difficulty retaining such things as addition and subtraction facts, or multiplication tables” meaning has a hard time understanding the poem more than math (Collins). “May recognize a word one day and not the next” means the reader would have a hard time remembering the overall meaning od a poem and its means (Collins). Also it would mean that the reader was very annoyed that he/she forgot everything about the
The poem, “Death of a Young Son by Drowning” written by Margaret Atwood was awfully sad and tragic as it described the death of her son and its lasting effect on her. The speaker begins the poem by describing how her son was brave, adventurous and led with success. However, the mood of the poem quickly changes as the young boy slipped off the bank and into the water. From there, the boy struggles in the water before eventually drowning. As he is pulled out of the water the mother realizes that all the plans that she had for the future are over and that a part of her has died alongside her son. Atwood uses multiple types of figurative language that gives this poem a sense of realism and really shows the reader the devastation and heartache that occurs after the loss of a child.
The poem titled Sea Rose by Hilda Doolittle tells about a rose, but not just a rose like any other. The poem instantly begins by going against the common connotation of a rose, the reader is given this passage “Rose, harsh rose,” (line 1). When the thought of a rose comes to mind the last word used to describe the soft petals and beautiful color would be harsh. H.D. (Hilda Doolittle) wants us to think about this rose as not an ordinary or normal rose but to see it as something more or something less. She goes on to say, “marred and with stint of petals” (line 2). To mar something is to disfigure or impair the quality/appearance of something, in this case a rose. Stint means to have an ungenerous amount; by this line we can understand that H.D. has begun to take a rose something commonly associated with beauty and love and twist into a disfigured and battered depiction of what it once was. The rest of the stanza goes on to say, “meagre flower, thin, sparse of leaf,”. A rose is meant to be a strong symbol of love and beauty, yet the depiction of the rose H.D. is giving the reader goes against the preconceived notions of what a rose should be. H.D.’s language and perception of the rose challenges to the reader to think of the rose as something more.
In 1968 there was a war going on in Vietnam. The war was called the Vietnam War. In the U.S, there was a shortage of people who volunteer to fight in the war so to cover the shortage the U.S used the draft process. The government sent out a draft notice to Tim O’Brien telling him that he was drafted to fight in the war. O’Brien had a choice to flee the U.S to go north to Canada or fight it the war. In the O’Brien considering leaving running away to Canada section of “On the Rainy River” by Tim O’Brien, the author makes the structural choice of first person POV and uses figurative language, such as hyperbole to emphasize the story's message that people run away from problems due to difficult decisions.
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In conclusion I was personally moved by this well-crafted poem because of the poetic techniques used and the setting. The setting was what particularly moved me because of how much I personally relate to the ocean. On my trips to Byron Bay and the Sunshine Coast I have seen waves that were both angry and calm. I have seen the waves smash against the rocks and the helpless swimmers get dragged out by the strong current. However I have never thought about the ocean in way the poet has exposed it. I believe that this poem has touched my heart like no other poem ever
The structure of the poem is free, and what it does is to give us the spirit of the sea. The poem is written in free verse, there is no restrictions of formal rhyme or meter. However, the length of the three stanzas of the poem is very even although it is not exact. It makes the flow of the entire poem became balanced. This form of structure is just like the wave of the sea. The period of the wave is natural and balanced; it is pretty even but it is not exact. Also, there are a lot of commas in the poem. Keeping using commas makes the sentences very long. In fact, the entire poem is constructed by 6 sentences only. It makes the feeling of the poem just like the sea, and lines of the poem are the wave of the sea. Each endings of the waves are
In the second stanza, as the poet invites us to “imagine the drip of it”, I find that the sound of the words here are so cleverly evocative that they even make me thirsty! The sibilance of the “small splash”, and the pleasing clanging of consanants in “echoing”, “tin” and “mug” deliver such a strong image of water that is so needed after the image of the “crack[ed].. pod”… It is significant that the poet describes this sound of water as the “voice of a kindly god” because it emphasises to us that very often the people in such a situation (where water is so scarce), view the advent of such a commodity as a kindly act of god. What else is there to do when you have no possibility to improve your situation? What else is there to believe when you
Quote: “Darkness poured out, submerging the ways between the trees till they were dim and strange as the bottom of the sea. The candle buds opened their wide white flowers glimmering under the light that pricked down from the first stars. Their scent spilled out into the air and took possession of the island.” (Chapter 3, Pg. 59)
Being in the home was like a separate world, one between life and death. When I reached the outside world again everything seemed so fresh. There were bright yellow-green leaves that hung with an arrogant vivacity, cars that sped by with such fervor, wind blowing with verve and energy, lively children playing with a vivacious lust for life, and the vitality that exudes from the air into your lungs. I wanted to bring this energy into
In stanza two, ambiguity is more prevalent. Although there are some elements of abstruse, Ammons uses specific words in repetition to create a degree of complexity for the poem. Ammons uses words such as “summary”, “deeper”, “longer”, and “length” to convey the point. I question why Ammons used these words, in particular, “summary” and “deeper” because the overall second stanza conveys a message of an idea or item of great importance. “Summary” and “deeper” contradicts that message because both words contrast each other. Summary generally means a short version on main points of an idea or event while deeper is a term people use to compare two objects or items. Although Ammons does not in any
To practice machismo, also known as masculinity in a Dominican culture, males have to hide their flaws and act a certain way. If men express their un-masculine nature, they will be seen as expressing their weakness. In Drown written by Junot Díaz, contains many stories about Dominican Republic male struggles as an immigrant in America. One of the struggles Díaz expresses in his text is appearing masculine in society’s eyes. From the story “Drown”, the unnamed narrator expresses what it means to be masculine. “Boyfriend” is a story about another unnamed narrator observing his neighbor’s relationship, and comparing it to his own past. Yunior, the narrator of the story “Negocios”, explains the history of his father Papi, also known as Ramón. Society creates many definitions for what it means to be masculine, leading the narrator from “Drown”, the narrator from “Boyfriend”, and Ramón struggling to choose between doing what they want for themselves, or do what society wants to see.
Nature is calm and serene, while this boy’s life has changed in a matter of seconds from living to dead in a tragic event. The end-stopped lines and enjambments are used very well in the remainder of the poem.
In complete honesty, I found your poem difficult to decipher. There are several ways the lines can be correlated. However, if you could provide a few lines of clarity within the poem, it would enable readers to have a better grasp on the poems theme/topic. The diction used throughout the poem appealed to me because the line structure appears simple and elementary. Nonetheless, the words in the poem seem carefully chosen and well thought out. Even the reference of Pygmalion in line three was clever “You are the man who made the statue. You are cold marble.” The way you make the transition from the subject being the creator of the statue to completely embodying the statue. After line twelve there is a shift in the imagery the poem provides.
Imagery is the strongest supporter of the theme. A description of the sea in its states of calmness and roughness are depicted. Sight and sound help intensify other images. The poems’ strongest feelings are usually expressed by their imagery, though rhythm is also used to convey meaning. Arnold uses the first stanza of the poem to create visual, auditory, and olfactory images that will allow the reader to picture the sea of which the speaker is viewing. Through the use of several poetic Figures of speech, sounds, and irony of words are also used. Line one; “The Sea is calm tonight”(1) has a gentle rhythm that can be compared to the “ebb and flow” (17) of the sea. With this description one can imagine a beautiful beach with water lapping upon the shore. The second line also gives the image of a calm sea. In the opening stanzas words such as “gleams”(4) and “glimmering”(5) are used, giving a sense of light. In contrast the ending stanzas use words such as