Thesis statements: Although the author of this article is good at providing some general information about its topic and overall seems to be linked together, but the lack of explanation and clarity makes the article confusing.
i. Author has done well on providing different information and linking the essay together.
a. The article contains different information by providing different opinions from various people, such as from student Justus Walker, his mom Karen Walker, and teacher Arlo Kempf.
b. Paragraph and paragraph are nicely linked together with words. For example, from paragraph 1, the “checklist with instructions” leads out the “some questions were hard to answer” on paragraph 2. ii. However, there are two critical problems on this
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On paragraph 4 on where Arlo Kempf comes out, the sentences that he said requires further explanation even though author quoted the sentence Arlo Kempf explained afterward.
b. On paragraph 5 Ms. Walker seems to reply on Arlo Kempf, but there are no explanation afterward.
c. On paragraph 7, it is comprised by different sentences that Ms. Walker says, but there are not further explanation after these sentences. iii. Furthermore, the second problem is that the clarity of the article is not good, and the lack of explanation takes part in this problem.
a. The lack of explanation can be best shown from the paragraph 4 and 5 on the conversation between Arlo and Ms. Walker.
b. Paragraph two, the author are showing some difficult questions from the white privilege test, but the last sentence of paragraph one is about discussion from students.
c. Here comes the fatal point. After paragraph 7, the topic word finally come out from paragraph 8, and after paragraph 8 it feels like author are just randomly talking, providing information.
Conclusion: Author arises an interesting idea and put out a fascinating topics to attack the readers’ attentions. However, the author did not focus on the group of people that read this article, and made two serious mistakes that turn the article into confusion, without them, with all these information that the author collect, the article will be very educational and can make people ponder about the original sin of white
The article would be great to many of the readers and highly recommend it to be published in the Shorthorn because first of all, this article is coherent
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“‘... I am listening to each [message] in order to see if I can piece it all together.’” -pg. 82
In this chapter, Lunsford details the planning and drafting process for a writer to organize their ideas with either a formal outline or a rough plan. Lunsford reminds writers to be flexible during the drafting process and not to think twice about changing elements of the essay at this point in the process. Lunsford goes on to explain the qualities academic paragraphs must have these include unity, development and coherence. To obtain unity within a paragraph all sentences should relate to the topic sentence of the paragraph. When developing a paragraph it is important to switch between general and specific ideas in the paragraph, while supporting those ideas with details, evidence and examples as required. Ensuring a paragraph is coherent is crucial when developing an academic paragraph. Because readers need to be able to follow a writers ideas easily, Lunsford gives her readers a method to follow to achieve this goal. This method includes using the general to specific ideas, repetition, parallel structures, and using transition words. The author notes that this method should also be used to link paragraphs
Q: What is the reader’s most common misinterpretation? How is the author saying we should interpret it?
This critique will outline the following, but not limited to: a brief summary of the article itself, a detailed review and assessment of the writing, and a choosing of agreement or disagreement.
| Demonstrates adequate and clear sense of voice, audience and purpose through thesis, topic selection and/or approach. Lacks sophisticated approach.
| Identifies the most important ambiguous words and phrases in the article and succinctly explains the effect ambiguity has on the author’s reasoning.
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topic to use it as a guide to developing the body and supporting paragraph. I also need to not shift and concentrate on the topic sentences that is based on the main points.
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