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TRAMP is a political, conspiracy thriller that sends a strong social commentary about the homeless. The script is also driven by solid themes about revenge, redemption, and second chances. The tone is dramatic. The protagonist is faced with strong moral choices. There’s a well-identified protagonist in Frank McCoy. McCoy is driven and motivated by his inner conflict. The goal is clear and the stakes are life and death. The script also offers a few nice twists and turns. In addition, there are some really well crafted action sequences. While there’s strength to the storytelling, the overall script would benefit from more development, especially in the areas of structure and pace. In the first act, the structure is non-linear, as it goes …show more content…

One is the attack on his family, which drives him to push them away, and one is the shooting of his partner. Both backstories are not needed. The second one regarding the shooting isn’t clearly understood. Clarify if he shot him on purpose to stop him, or for another reason. The concern about McCoy is that he becomes too dark of a character. The suicide attempts actually makes McCoy less likable, because he becomes too pathetic and too weak of a hero. It’s also very challenging to believe that Clark would allow McCoy to continue with the undercover assignment given his unstable mental health history. An audience doesn’t mind a cynical hero, but one that is so depressed and dark, becomes more difficult to care and root for. He’s a smart man, but make sure his character transformation is clear. Consider making him a character that really doesn’t like “tramps” or homeless people. At the end, he gains a new appreciation about what they have gone through and what great people they really are – no different from anyone else. There are several identified antagonists including Flanagan, Rifkee, and Brady. The concern about having so many is that they dilute each other. Consider if Rifkee is needed and focus more on Flanagan as the main antagonist and then the twist with …show more content…

There’s nothing about her that make her feel unique or stand out. Continue to work on her. Lindsey is sweet as the daughter. Clark is likable, but nothing much is known about him as a character. The homeless characters are very engaging, especially Irvin. He’s a wise mentor and he shares good chemistry with McCoy. The dialogue reveals information about character, but as mentioned the script is heavy with dialogue and this needs to be trimmed. The conversation between McCoy and Flanagan can be stronger and more compelling on page 83. The overall tension feels diluted by the sluggish pace. However, there are some strong, action sequences. The initial battle between McCoy and the homeless man is solid and reminds one of THE HUNGER GAMES. In fact, consider creating a thriller in which this element of the script is not so limited. Like in THE HUNGER GAMES, expand this premise and this world. Maybe a homeless man and McCoy are forced to track down one another (or hunt each other), until the other one is killed. Maybe the bad guys are threatening their families etc. It’s just a suggestion, but this would add more action and tension. The other well-executed action scene with a twist is the car scene in which McCoy believes his daughter is trapped inside the car. This is skillfully

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