How Effectively/Appropriately Am I Performing this/these Genre-Attempt(s): Have taken detailed peer review notes; make your peer-reviewer(s) go into troubleshooting detail on workshop days: Insist that they look for problems or flaws. Deal with more than sentence-level issues (grammar, punctuation, etc.), but do mention those if that’s an issue. Then, go beyond what the peer-reviewer(s) might have said. Write also a self-assessment. While I usually discourage writing a 5-paragraph essay, that might not be a bad strategy for completing this—and the previous—section. Whatever you mention, don’t be vague or general. Show that you’re working on providing a clearer context, using more businesslike diction, adhering to the conventions of …show more content…
After that we took a look at what our reviewers wrote for us. In their review of our PowerPoint, one thing they stated was, “The only thing that we would change is the font. It seems to be very close together and difficult to read.” We took these two suggestions into consideration, and decided it would be best to follow their advice and change up the font and spacing. We changed the font sizes of both the titles and subtitles to fit best for the specific slide. Each slide now has different font sizes and formatting to make it most appealing for specific slide that it is on, and it made our presentation easier to follow. Another suggestion that we received was “The bullet points are not consistent throughout the PowerPoint”. This was a silly mistake that would have been foolish to leave in a presentation addressing a professional audience. After looking at what our reviewers were referencing, we noticed that the bullets changed shape as the presentation progressed. This made the presentation inconsistent and we decided that it had to be changed. Changing the presentation to make the bullets consistent made our presentation appear much more professional. The final suggestion that we received on the Powerpoint from the peer review pertained to the titles of the slides. They pointed out a couple problems with our titles stating “It is not necessary to capitalize words like “the” or “of”.” After looking over the
You will exchange your drafts with your group mates and, using the feedback rubric from Unit 3.2. (page 33-35), assess their essays. Remember to be polite, correct in your judgments, and helpful – you can notice the things that might help your peers to write an outstanding work. Read each essay carefully at least three times: at first you get acquainted with your peer’s work; during the second reading your check up for the structural precision; use the third time to ensure that you have noticed everything and provided constructive feedback on anything that is unclear to you; highlighted parts of the essay that are not specific; pointed out where more details seem necessary or, just the other way round, the information appears
Power point presentation design theme is simple and provides the consistent background, which followed standard rule of using contrasting colors for text and background (National Conference of State Legislatures, “n.d.”). The theme does not overthrow the context of the presentation. Standard rule of effective presentation has been followed in this presentation such as including the basic design them, slide numbers, and providing the consistent font color. However, the selected font color of the each slide’s title is red which can distract and mislead the reader. Red font color is utilized mostly in emphasizing information. Therefore, red text on every slide is distracting factor in this case. Through out the presentation, diagrams and related pictures have been included to add the interest to the context. For example, explanation of the
Discussion Board—Your initial response will be a reflection on last week’s peer review process from last week. Explain three pieces of feedback and how you incorporated this feedback into your final draft. Also, did you agree with the feedback you received? Why or Why not? Then, respond to at least two peers. Compare and contrast your responses with theirs’. Did you see any patterns? Share your findings with your peers.
The activities that helped the most in writing this paper where the chapter outlines, I felt like these helped me understand the material better. I used a web outline and this helped get everything organized. The comments form the peer review were not as helpful as the last time. It is my fault though because I did not add at the end what specifically I wanted help with.
For our presentation, I believe that we stated our main point, and reiterated it throughout the presentation that we wanted our fellow students to be able to understand the physiological influence of altitude on cerebral blood flow following a concussion. We included some sub points that were at a level of content that was appropriate for our audience, and I believe that our slide design emphasized relevant pictures rather than words, while maintaining the pictorial aspect of the rule of thirds. I believe that we could have emphasized the use of pictures rather that word throughout our presentation, as some our slides were indeed a bit too wordy. We meant to include a question and answer sequence within our presentation, but a lapse in our performance lead to this segment being excluded, so I
In The Everyday Writer, I strongly believed that chapter 10 “Reviewing & Revising” was most helpful as I could relate to some of its statements. I believed that by reviewing my work, I’m bound to discover mistakes. By doing so, I could make minor adjustment to my work. However, sometimes looking over my own work isn’t enough so, that’s where a peer reviewer comes in. A peer reviewer is someone who challenges your work. By doing so, they give me a strong sense of doubt as I tend to overlook certain areas yet, the peer reviewer that I came across didn’t really help.
I need my paper to be easy to read, so I applied all these tools. The more I revised my writing, the more grammatical errors I corrected. After the first draft correction, I learn there were words I took for granted and used them in my essay that had a completely different meaning. I made generalized statements and did not attach much evidence to support most of the claims I noted in my writing. To improve my writing, I search the Internet to note other people’s remarks about these essays. Since I did not want to be embarrassed in front of my classmate for use of grammar, I had to read more to write more clearly. I did not like the peer review because it will allow my classmates to see my grammatical errors and would think of me to be a horrible English language person. But because of these peer reviews, I tried to make my text simple so that everyone could read and understand my writing.
I also used many online paper editor sources to check for spelling errors and reviewed with my peers to check that my paper was cohesive. I had my mother proofread my paper. She felt that I managed to inform my reader on the situation very well throughout my evening. I also had classmates, such as Diana and Mandy, read through sections of my paper to ensure that I was comprehending the requirements similarly to the way they had. I also compared with those who received full points on sections I did not in order to understand what I needed to improve on to achieve full credit in that
In this article, Richard Straub outlines some very useful tips for a complete and thoughtful review of another person's writing. Straub’s gives the reader advice on how to improve the feedback procedure when critiquing someone else's paper. He writes about how the reader should tackle a proper revision. Some of his suggestions and tips include: how to format comments and where to put them, how much feedback to include, and the proper tone that should be used when providing feedback. Straub tells the reader to praise and critique in equal measure so as to not seem harsh. He also says not to be ambiguous instead to point the writer in a specific direction without telling them exactly how to fix the paper.
I also have a process when I peer review papers. I make sure to always compliment the student’s paper and then I point out some areas where there may need some improvement. I always make sure to provide an example so they know what I am trying to say.
The feedback I received was varied. The planning, structure and content of the presentation was good and well structured. Based on this feedback I was happy with the flow and how the presentation came across from this perspective. As a result I don’t think I would change how I went about creating the presentation. I do a lot of planning and project work as part of my day to day job so structuring it I found quite
I always try to make sure that my teachers understand what they are reading or writing, the reason is because when I read, I like to make sure I am understanding the material I am reading.When I finish a sentence, I stop to reread it. If it sounds correct to me, I move on to the next sentence. If a sentence does not sound correct, I work on it for it to sound better. The same rule applies to paragraphs. I always make sure I edit a paragraph before I move on to the next. I have done this with all essays. I would make sure a paragraph conveys important points relating to the topic of the
The extent that I think I completed all level revision successfully I took every step in order to make sure my essay was up to par and have as little mistakes as possible. In order to complete my revision I took my essay down to the writing center where they help with each step and make sure that I am doing the correct things for my paper like punctuations and sentence level revision. The editing part of my essay was also done in the writing center I took a long part of my time making sure my paper was understandable and matched the steps I needed to get a good grade on my paper. As for the proof reading I let 3 people read it as I was getting done with it to make sure they knew what I was talking about and that it made sense. So for all the
Self-assessment writing is a great way to gain insight into how effective my writing style is and helps me to recognize improvement where they’re needed. Throughout the semester there have been three major essays written. Each one a different style giving the writer a different mindset each time, this results in the finding problems in one essay that may not have happened in another. When self-assessing there needs to be to a criteria on which one can reflect on and categorize their weakest and strongest points in writing, these criteria for example can be content, organization and coherence, style, argument and support, and mechanics. After categorizing there are questions that need to be asked such as, as a writer, what do you do well? And what aspect of your writing needs the most improvement?
I simply wrote one draft without using any feedback from adults or peers. If I decided to use feedback on my piece, I know it would have been more beneficial to my development as a writer. On this piece I earned an 85%, in which I wasn’t satisfied with. From this, I was allowed to revise my piece, allowing me to go in depth into my writing to earn a better grade. Also, before submitting my revised essay, I asked my mom to read over my work to see if it would raise my grade. She gave me a few valuable pieces of advice that helped raise the grade on my essay to a 90%. From the Thematic Unit, I learned to improve my writing process to prepare myself for the future. At the end of the year, I was told to write my own essay about William Shakespeare’s Twelfth Night novel, using my own writing process to be successful. My effective writing process included writing a first draft and completing self-assessment afterwards. The first step of my process helped me understand how my writing could develop into a stronger piece. After self-assessment, I wrote a second draft and had a peer review my work. Finally, I made a third and final draft in order to present the best version of my writing. As shown from the Soliloquy Essay, my writing process is