An orphaned young girl teams up with a former enforcer, as they are pursued by a ruthless Mexican mobster.
STORY COMMENTS
THE STRENGTH OF TEN MEN is a captivating action, thriller. The strength of this story is no doubt the complex and highly compelling characters that drive the plot. The core characters are thrust into a harrowing life and death situation where the stakes are extremely high.
The script offers intriguing twist and turns. There are solid themes about trust, family, believing, and faith.
The idea of a young orphan girl teaming up with an enforcer is an appealing plotline. There’s a smart twist when the enforcer turns out to be the person who killed the young girl’s father. In addition, a ruthless Mexican mobster hunts
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For the most part, it sounds crisp and has a nice rhythm. The voices of the characters are consistent with their personalities and reveals information about them.
The only area that should be polished is the running gag about “whores.” This is still overdone. It’s funny in the beginning, but then loses its charm. The discussion about “big dicks” isn’t all that engaging.
The overall tension works best in the opening. The conflict and tension in the second act can be stronger if there’s more of an urgency and ticking clock. The current pace hinders this. The tension doesn’t enhance again until the midpoint.
The script is professionally presented although there are a few minor typos (pages 4, 45, and 54). Also, the character of Dennis introduced twice.
SUMMARY & MARKETABILITY
The plot is engaging and merits consider with revisions, especially in the first half of the script regarding the goal, tension, pace, and action.
The strengths of this script are the characters and they can attract talent.
The action is also well crafted.
The script should be marketable in both the domestic and international market.
The script should appeal to the mainstream action, thriller audience.
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